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[其它]请同学们帮忙critique 一哈,“最寒冷的冬天是旧金山的夏季”的英文简介: |
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Too later? -- hwarrensen - (849 Byte) 2006-8-21 周一, 13:46 (884 reads) |
乡村游客
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作者:乡村游客 在 海归茶馆 发贴, 来自【海归网】 http://www.haiguinet.com
I really like this version! Great job, hwarrensen! Of course, having a good story in the first place makes this exercise enjoyable, doesn't it?
One suggestion: I'd change "young Chinese girls" to "young Chinese women". After all, they already graduated from college. Using "girls" leads people to think they are much younger (high schooler or younger).
A few minor corrections (marked bold and strike out):
Katherine, Megan, and Sandy (put your girls’ names here), three innocent young Chinese girls women rushed to the States in 1997 and then struggled from dot-com to dot-tomb. From the sand beach under Golden Gate Bridge to the rocky and snowy Tahoe, you will follow their footprints in seeking their American Dreams…
Welcome to SAN FRANCISCO’S SUMMER!
With the title inspired by Mark Twain’s once famous claim, “The coldest winter I’ve ever spent was a summer in San Francisco,” this is one of the most dazzling and startling on-line novels that touched the hearts of millions. Living in the Silicon Valley herself, the author painted vivid portrays portraits of these girls women in the gorgeous scenery of San Francisco, one of the world’s most romantic cities. You will share their pains and gains, tears and laughter, attempts and losses, and ever-lasting belief in true love.
作者:乡村游客 在 海归茶馆 发贴, 来自【海归网】 http://www.haiguinet.com
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