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作者：rainbow6 在 海归商务 发贴, 来自【海归网】 http://www.haiguinet.com
I think that 校长 was confused by many different comments on your novel.
If the goal of this novel is for 商战+休闲, you actually are at right direction.
I also do not agree most of the comments from l24959.
I believe if you watch some good 电视剧, you will 借鉴some idea how to tell good story and how to catch the audience’s attention. I think that you were success at the first part of this novel, ( the stories related to 港务局 case.). Good stories normally told in 波浪模式 on time axis. 商战help to bring up the tense and 风花雪月 help to relax and prepare for the next. 节奏感 is very important. Within one story, (which is in 空间 axis), you should be thinking that you are the photographer, you use your camera to let the
audience to see what was going. In港务局 case, you did some good samples. You showed that 内心活动within 包 and 董, you switched your camera smoothly to let the audience to enjoy your “movie”. All the风花雪月 around it were very well embedded.
Please trust your First feelings and should not be confused by different comments, otherwise, your novel will be 四不象 and you will be frustrated by 条条框框.
My suggestion for future would be: 把握好节奏.
Rainbow.
作者：rainbow6 在 海归商务 发贴, 来自【海归网】 http://www.haiguinet.com
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 通知：《回 国 训 火 记》第二十八集：《星雨心愿、情长梦短》（上）已经发表！ -- 安普若 - (1381 Byte) 2010-2-20 周六, 14:20 (90757 reads) - 写得真好 -- lldd - (48 Byte) 2010-10-30 周六, 12:05 (3274 reads)
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